Fixing Parts in Our Report

There's some problem in the introduction part of the draft

report. Previous introduction of the draft report was wrong

technically because we don't really have sufficient

information and content on our topic for our report due

to lack of researches and survey.

Therefore the direction we want the readers follow were not

clear. We didn't provide the bold statement that can lead the

readers to follow the direction we wanted them to follow.

We found out these problem after reading slides given by Mr. Too.

Then, we started on fixing these problems in our report according

to the guideline provided in the slides. We starts to gather more

information about our topic on the web and through surveys.

By this way, we collected different ideas, experience and point

of view on the topic which helps us a lot on the report.

Moreover, we can define the types of readers for our report.

They can studies or know more about the topic of our report by

knowing the facts, or even answers for their questions on our

topic or related to it.

Thats all for current post, just want to update you all about the

fixing problems for the reports.